Here is my writing on the "My Dream House". I would be grateful if someone would review my essay and give me feedback on the sentence structure and grammar of writing.
My Dream House
House is a place where we can shelter and it gives us
a protection from rain, heat , storm etc. Everyone has their own choice on what type of house they feel comfortable to live in, so do I. I enjoy to liveliving in a calm and open environment, so house built on small land (I'm not sure what you mean by 'small land' here) won't be my choice. I want a large open space surrounded by compound, where I can stroll, especially when I feel bored onat my job. I want the a garden in front of my house, which will give me a natural environment. One more thing to mention here, I want thea house which is far from main city and industrial area since I don't like thea noisy environment. Oh, yeah, what about the size of the house? I prefer the medium size of the house having,which has 2 or 3 floors in it. I don't like very large buildings because I have small family and I don't like to rent my home. I prefer to stay inon the second or ground floor during the summer season because the top floors is excessively heated heat up excessively during the very hot season, whereas I like to stay inonthe second or third floor during the winter, as the ground floor will be becomes excessively cold during that period. (Try to shorten this sentence or divide it into two) Next thing is abouta gym room, I would like to have a fitness center within my premise as I am a young boy and I want to be a healthy person.
I have mentioned so many physical needs (you mentioned only one of them, actually, - shelter) in my above paragraph (in my paragraph above), but I would like to
conculdeconclude my writingessayby saying thata cool and amicable family environment is must to should make our homesfeel like a heaven. Otherwise, it will would be a hell, and we would like to spend most of our time outside the home rather than with our famil yies.
Once I had a dream of a dream house. It was so beautiful you cannot think about it! It was painted with many colours blue, green, red, pink, yellow etc. It had a chocolate road and beside that road there was a park. In the park there was a swing, a slide, a climbing frame, a tree house and a swimming pool. Inside the house there was a table made with vanilla flavour and it was laid with delicacies. I licked my lips as it was looking tasty but I could not bite into it because it was a dream and if I opened my eyes, my dream would break. So I continued to see my dream. Then in another room, there was a bed made with ice-cream cones. It was a delightful dream. But after some time I woke up and my dream broke. This is the story of my dream house. Wish I could rewind that dream once again.
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